Thursday, February 10, 2011

Inevitability of Tomorrow revised first sentence and hook paragraph

Adams was unaware that the Resistance recruiting him was commanded by his mother, a woman he hadn't seen in thirty years. He was uncertain the true enemy in the 'Inevitability of Tomorrow' was the State Justices. Sure they were downloading thought controls to their citizens, but he was unbelieving that his fight for freedom and struggle for survival would create a new human species that would threaten the very existence of mankind in the 22nd. century.

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